What do you think?

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:as:

We come across rough times at school sometimes when pressure is just from all directions. So i started this essay about expectations yesterday...

"So many times in our teenage years, society implicates specific careers of what is expected from the future of an individual as he starts off his early years of education. Through stereotypical views of career expectations, society pressures individuals of what is expected from them, causing: ‘what am I going to be when I grow up’ a teen’s nightmare rather than a prioritised goal to look forward to. While society ‘thinks’ they see the future within them, teens, deep inside see a completely different future, within their own self."

hmm... i wonder if that made you frown

I've got the first 3 paragraphs up.. but i thought i get your opinions before proceeding...

let me know what you think...

[RaMo911]

You know i didn't get what the sentence or paragraph meant when i read it (to much big words) but i can tell you what people think they want to become and what happens.

Well I'm 15 turning 16, And i want to become a Computer Engineer or a Rapper. I haven't told anyone about the Rapping part, 1 of my friends are on this forum and i think he knows already well. I've told everyone i want to become a computer engineer but i hardly go to school but I'm extremely good in computer (hamduililah) but when i tell people their like "Pfft yeah aiight whatever you can keep dreaming". Like what the hell what do you want me to become a garbage cleaner?.

Thats what lets the youth down these days and makes them turn to drugs and other things as suicide. They become in-confident and lose hope eventually. Then thats when the other people start saying "See what i tell you your not going to make it Haha just pathetic". This is not just happening in families and communities but in the school itself the teachers make you feel low and lose hope!.

These days everything is a Goal.

Salam. Hope i helped in anyway.

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lol.. i do think the sentences need some breaking down...

In the body its a two way discussion, so either way it kinda related to what you've mentioned. In fact, what you said above backs up this particular sentence:

"While society ‘thinks’ they see the future within them, teens, deep inside see a completely different future, within their own self."

Many people don’t see our future from the perspective of how we see it deep inside.

I find it extremely annoying when people, because of their high expectations in a person, loose faith in their abilities when they stuff up for a while – but it’s usally not the case when the person is consistent...

Insha allah with consistent effort you will be able to prove to your teachers that yes, you can do it. Slacking of school may not be the best option brother... but insha allah when you work for what you want to achieve, you will achieve it.

Allahu alam..

[AbdulQader]

Assalamualaykom

Uve addressed a very interesting topic there Sister!

I think Ramo raised a very good point in fact, another side to the story. Contrary to the idea that alot of teens feel pressured to live up to their parents expectations (or society's for that matter) of becoming Doctors, engineeres etc. There are others who are put down by those around them, who are pressured into feeling they're 'not good enough'.

This is indeed sadder than the first case in which ur pressured by ur parents to become either a doctor lawyer, engineer etc.

What Ramo has mentioned isnt rare at all, Ive met, seen, heard of, a lot of ppl in similar situations... going from wanting to be engineers, to not wanting to go uni, to dropping out after yr 10, or going on to yr 12 for the sake of it. but there are others, who dont give into the pressures of 'society'... and achieve, as Ramo put it, their 'Goals'.

Insha'Allah bro, if u do decide to become a computer engineer, u'll make a great one.


While society ‘thinks’ they see the future within them, teens, deep inside see a completely different future, within their own self."

Thats a very good statement. if u can back that up with examples, evidence, quotes or critiques (from perhaps books or articles on this subject)... oh and I think the term 'society' is quite a broad term, may be say what ur specifically referring to in the body (which u were probably gunna do anyway), which aspect of society? family, school, media, movies?

let us hear the other 2 paragaphs insha'Allah.

insha'Allah it all goes well

Wasaalamualaykom.

[Abdulhak_Bey]

Selamun Aleykum din kardesim

one day this world will be under Islam and then we will live in peace. But until then no peace. :saws:

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umm... but the essay is not about peace and religon:confused:

Anyhow, jazak Allahu khair for the advice akhi. Using society can be broad, you're right. How about, members of society? And later on mention teachers and parents?

Let's see if the other two fit in, here it goes:

The construction of careers set by members of society influence the way a teacher or a parent see the image of a teen’s future. Not realising that society is a whole picture in its own self, they give teens the perception that if you do not achieve what is stereotyped a ‘wow’ you will be looked down on and thus, have not worked to achieve your ultimate best. This is used commonly, instead of focussing on the ability of that teen, simply because a person is a master of their own ability and not the ability of others. ‘I have high expectations’, ‘I’m a tough marker’ are simple examples of what makes a teen see themselves as though they do not fit the criterion of a particular subject at school and to some extent, cause an aim to be seen as almost impossible to achieve.

On the other hand, many teens see expectations as a challenge. They thrive in education like there’s not tomorrow, with inclination and hope that the path they are travelling will help them achieve the stereotypes of educational roles inflicted on them by by these role models (as in, parents and teachers). Some become doctors and some lawyers; maybe scientists or astronauts! Isn’t that amazing? But that’s only because society sees it to be so. While some teens proceed and conquer the challenge that they’ve undertook in achieving these careers, others do not cope and become influenced by failing these expectations.

[traveler]

Assalam-u-Alaikum,

I had a go at improving the first three paragraphs of your essay. Please don’t feel offended if I have changed it around a bit. I have'nt made any extra points, just edited a bit.


So many times, throughout our teenage years, we are faced with society’s expectation of pursuing a specific career path, leaving us to question, and at times, abandon the pursuit of our aspirations and any consideration of a career path that is consistent with our personal strengths and weaknesses. The stereotypical views of various careers, that society in general holds, forces the teenager into a corner, causing them to shape their life according to what is expected of them, rather than allowing the individual to wonder, “what am I going to be when I grow up”. This process of planning for the future, combined with the many struggles that all teenagers go through, as they grow into young adults, becomes a nightmare and years later, may have a detrimental impact on the individual’s lifestyle.

Teacher and caregivers, the individuals responsible for guiding teenagers through these tough times, are well aware of the emphasis that is placed on various careers. Teachers and caregivers are influenced by these perceptions and the relationship that position the role they hold in the teenager’s life therefore plays a key role in upholding career stereotypes. As pointed our earlier, these stereotypes and the expectations that follow can be dangerous and teachers and caregivers should know better than this. It must be understood that society is a world in itself and should play no role in solely determining what career path to follow in the future. The view that if you do not meet these expectations, you will be looked down on and that you have not worked to achieve your best, should be discarded. Rather, they need to focus on the abilities of teenagers. A person is a master of their own ability and not the ability of others.

In contrast to the view that such expectations burden teenagers, there are also those teenagers who perceive these expectations as a challenge, giving them the opportunity to strengthen their abilities and to show society that they have got what it takes. For these individuals, education is a way of life and they absorb knowledge like there’s no tomorrow, with the determination that the path they are traveling will assist them to meet what is expected of them………….

[traveler]

Assalam-u-Alaikum,

I had a go at improving/modifying the first three paragraphs of your essay. Please don’t feel offended if I have changed it around a bit. I haven’t made any extra points, just edited a bit.

Disregard the post immediately above, some punctuation needs to be corrected. This is the one:

So many times, throughout our teenage years, we are faced with society’s expectation of pursuing a specific career path, leaving us to question, and at times, abandon, the pursuit of our aspirations and any consideration of a career path that is consistent with our personal strengths and weaknesses. The stereotypical views of various careers, that society in general holds, forces the teenager into a corner, causing them to shape their life according to what is expected of them, rather than allowing the individual to reflect, “what am I going to be when I grow up?” This process of planning for the future, combined with the many struggles that all teenagers go through, as they grow into young adults, becomes a nightmare and years later, may have a detrimental impact on the individual’s lifestyle.

Teacher and caregivers, the individuals responsible for guiding teenagers through these tough times, are well aware of the emphasis that is placed on various careers. These sources of guidance and advice are influenced by these perceptions and the role that they have in the teenager’s life therefore perpetuates these career stereotypes. As pointed our earlier, these stereotypes and the expectations that follow, can be dangerous and teachers and caregivers should know better than this. It must be understood that society is a world in itself and should play no role in solely determining what career path to a teenager should follow. The view that if you do not meet these expectations, you will be looked down on and that you have not worked to achieve your best, should be discarded. What should be focused on are the abilities of teenagers and what they personally feel they are capable of. Indeed, a person is a master of their own ability and not the ability of others.

In contrast to the view that such expectations burden teenagers, there are also those teenagers who perceive these expectations as a challenge, giving them the opportunity to strengthen their abilities and to show society that they have got what it takes…………

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Now that sounds more like it! Masha Allah that's great edition traveler, i really appreciate it. The ideas are a lot more organised and structured now. Insha Allah working my way out from there should get this essay finsihed properly.. It's really the learning process rather than finishing it that im concerned with.

I see where you're coming from with the way you've structured it. Insha Allah if i've got some time on my shoulders, i shall continue it and post it right in!

:jazk:!!